The New X-men, chapter three.

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The New X-men, chapter three.
Topic Started: Mar 5 2010, 01:16 PM (195 Views)
Gorvar	Mar 5 2010, 01:16 PM Post #1
Self claimed fanfic critic. Posts: 3,265 Group: Members Member #38 Joined: February 8, 2009	Logan slipped on his costume, groaning when he saw it in the mirror. He pondered the reason for wearing a bright yellow/blue suit during a night op whilst slipping his gloves on. He inspected the blue glove, noticing the glove was specifically made for his claws. Xavier had him and Creed in mind for this mission for a long time. ‘Lookin’ good, runt.’ Creed chuckled behind him. Logan grinned back, looking up at his larger team-mate, who was also wearing a similar costume like him, only more befitting and with a heavy trench coat. ‘They got you yer old coat back there Creed?’ Logan asked, putting the other glove on. ‘This aint mine.’ Creed sniffed his coat. ‘To new, to sterile...no blood.’ Logan nodded, walking with Creed to the hangar bay where the rest of the team was waiting. ‘Why are we doin’ this Creed?’ Logan asked, looking up. ‘Why?’ Victor chuckled. ‘We’re going off to fight legion of enemy robots and your asking why?’ ‘Seems logical, we don’t even know how we ended up here, let alone forget two decades worth of memories.’ ‘Ask questions later runt, enjoy the scrap first, that’s my motto.’ ‘I know yor motto Creed, I saw you watchin’ that girl.’ ‘What girl?’ Logan glared. ‘You know who, stay away from her Creed, we don’t want to upset our host.’ Victor stared at the smaller man, but nodded. ‘Fair enough, but you owe me Logan.’ ‘I’ll buy you a beer when we get back.’ The two men entered the lift, chrome all around safe for the openings with light coming out. The doors shut automatically, the elevator going down. Logan vastend his belt with an X on it, noticing Creed shares the same belt. The elevator opened it’s door, the two occupants looking amazed at the sight. They were in a cavern, a LARGE cavern, with enough controls and machines to direct air traffic for the entire country, a large black jet plane, and a waterfall. The team was stood talking to each other while Nick Fury, Charles Xavier, Scott Summers and Doctor Moira were going over the plan one more time near one of the machines. ‘So you’re a private investigator?’ Liam asked the Belgian superhero. ‘Oui, I am.’ George nodded. ‘Been doing it for a few years now.’ ‘How come?’ The Army Ranger asked intrigued. ‘Well ever since I decided to be a super hero, I came across things others would pay money for, that and I have a knack for finding things.’ Liam nodded. ‘I always wanted to be a PI myself, hence I’m asking, does it pay?’ ‘Depends how good you are mon ami.’ George smiled. ’Une question, how come you and Chief rudeness over there don’t get along, aren’t you...army types all frères?’ Liam blinked. ‘Brothers, aren’t you lot all brothers?’ Liam shook his head. ‘Not always.’ They watched Proudstar mentally preparing for the upcoming mission, leaning against the jet. He barely opened his eyes when a purple cloud BAMPF-ed above him, the blue furred elf like man hanging upside down one of the engines, smiling at the Apache. ‘Gutendag Mister Proudstar.’ Kurt smiled. Proudstar did not reply. ‘They called me ‘The Amazing Nightcrawler’ back home, what is your nickname?’ ‘.....Thunderbird.’ John replied. ‘Ah Thunderbird, like that tv-show with puppets, I loved th-‘ John glared. ‘My name is sacred, you will not insult my name again or you will regret it, understood?’ Kurt blinked, but nodded. ‘Ja, ich habbe het verstaan.’ Kurt ported off again. ‘So…..’ Abigail asked. ‘You were a thief once?’ ‘I was.’ Ororo replied. ‘But I have been reformed, the professor helped me with that, I owe him a favour, hence I am here.’ Abigail nodded. ‘So...what are your powers?’ ‘I can change the weather.’ ‘Cool, like shoot thunderbolts at people?!’ Storm nodded. ‘Yes.’ ‘Awesome, I can only shrink in size....’ Abby pouted. ‘All powers are useful one way or another Miss Fornell.’ Ororo said with a smile. ‘Call me Abby and I stop my moaning.’ ‘Deal.’ ‘Ladies and ladies listen up!’ Nick Fury shouted, the team coming together. ‘We’re splitting up to TWO groups.’ Fury raised his backhand, raising two fingers. ‘Team one consists of Cyclops, Wolverine, Nightcrawler, Thunderbird, Sergeant Kynde, Time-Warrior, Storm and Electron.’ The names grouped up. ‘Team two is all the rest of you, both teams will be dropped on opposite sides of the castle, Team one rescues the missing X-men, team two secures a ride to get across the borders.’ ‘Why across the border Colonel Fury, sir?’ Kurt raised his hand. ‘Wouldn’t Herr Doom just follow us?’ ‘If he does he would be trespassing into foreign soil.’ Liam said. ‘And guessing off his previous record I think he rather does not want to go to war.’ Logan worried, he knew Victor when he was riled up. He glanced at his larger mate, Creed already grinning, giving a assuring nod. Logan still didn’t like the teams one bit....but orders were orders. ‘What are we waiting for, get in that jet, Now, go go go go go!’ Fury shouted, Liam, John and Logan already on the move. ‘When did we get drafted?’ George asked, running inside. ‘I think just now comrade.’ Peter replied. ‘Good luck everyone, we will watch over you!’ Charles shouted over the starting engines. The jet’s engines whistled loudly, already lifting up when everyone sat down and buckled up. It shot forward like a bullet from a gun, passed the waterfall up above into the sky. Moira sighed. ‘I still have a bad feeling about this Charles...’ Charles nodded. ‘I know Moira...but this is our only chance.’ Fury picked up a phone. ‘Fury.....right.’ He shut it off, going to the computer. ‘Colonel?’ Moira asked. ‘My contact in Londen.’ He typed in a few keys. ‘She gave me the latest feed on Latvaria.’ The monitor switched to the satellite map of Latvaria, Fury cursing loudly. ‘What is it, what’s wrong Colonel?’ ‘They knew we’re coming, Charles turn that jet around!’ ‘I cant, it’s set in automatically.’ ‘Try to warn them!’ Moira gasped. ‘They’re heading into a trap!’ Charles wheeled over to a machine, trying to raise contact with the Blackbird. ‘Communications are out...Moira, get me to Cerebro, quickly!’ The jet flew at top speed towards Europe, both teams keeping themselves busy. ‘I will lead Team one, Sabretooth will lead Team two.’ Cyclops said, showing the virtual map. ‘Sabretooth?’ Victor raised his eyebrow. ‘You need a code-name Mister Creed.’ Cyclops said. ‘You are one of the best trackers, so more able to find our means of escape then anyone else.’ Logan coughed. ‘Except for Wolverine.’ Cyclops talked, explaining SHIELD’s latest feed when George whisperd to Wolverine. ‘Long time no see pal.’ Wolverine looked up. ‘What?’ ‘What, don’t you remember me?’ Logan stared. ‘We fought alongside each other in Brugge remember, HYDRA?’ ‘I got no idea what yer talkin’ about kid.’ ‘Stop pulling my chain man, I know it was only one night, but come on.’ Logan thought long and deep...who was this man? Somewhere Logan remembered George’ scent, but from where.... ‘Are we there yet?’ Sean asked. ‘This jet is sure taking it’s time getting dere.’ ‘We’re just passing England.’ Cyclops said. ‘Jump ETA in three min-‘ he paused. ‘Urghm...Cyclops?’ Abby asked. ‘It’s the professor, he says-‘ The jet shook and turned, making a complete U-turn. ‘What the fuck?!’ Liam shouted. ‘what the fuck happened?!’ Cyclops unbuckled, going to the main monitor. ‘it’s a missile, we’re hit!’ ‘So far for a stealth mission den...’ Wolverine growled, unclipping his safety belt. ‘Suit up!’ Scott threw the jet packs over. Another heavy shock rocked the jet, people falling over. ‘Storm, create dark clouds so we can jump, TW can you stop time for the outside world so we can set up?’ Ororo nodded, her eyes turning completely white, raising her arms as thunder cracked outside. ‘On it boss-man.’ Gargan said and concentrated, time stopping outside. ‘ Your jetpacks are locked on to your team’s location’s, you don’t have to worry!’ ‘This beats being in the lab dissecting neutrons!’ Abigail cheered. ‘Your a weird woman, Tovarsh.’ Peter put his jetpack on. ‘Stand back everyone!’ Cyclops shouted, a optical blast blowing the backdoor up. ‘Holy shit!’ Liam exclaimed. ‘you think the professor wont mind the giant hole in his plane?!’ ‘The engines are fried, we’re going down!’ Cyclops said, putting his pack on. ‘The jet will crash somewhere safe.’ Tw began to shiver. ‘Dudes...feeling lightheaded here!’ ‘Hold on for a bit longer George.’ Storm put her hand on his shoulder. Tw nodded as Cyclops ordered everyone of the plane. ‘Kurt, get George out when the last one of us is gone.’ ‘Jawohl!’ the elf nodded. Creed elbow nudged Logan. ‘Kid, can lead right, good luck runt.’ He said and jumped out after John. Wolverine growled and jumped after him. It didn’t feel right, it felt slow, stroppy. Logan did a lot of these drops, but never with time having stopped before. Suddenly it felt like he was moving twice...no...thrice as fast. Time’s back up he thought. He heard shouting, looking to his left he saw Time-warrior spinning around, shouting with glee, Nightcrawler in close pursuit. Logan shook his head. ‘Amateurs...’ The castle’s guards were in high alert, mechanical and human alike. The mood was grim, the rain and thunder did not help in elevating it. The rain seemed to stop slowly, but still fell down hard. A human guard, along with two doombots, patrolled the eastern wall. ‘I hope this is worth it....’ he muttered. ‘Missing my daughter’s birthday.....’ [Your presence is required Soldier 457 C-7.] one of the robots replied. [Any flaws in your performance will result in severe punishment.] ‘I know, I know...’ the soldier replied. ‘But you robots wou-‘ When he turned around he saw one robot being impaled by two swords. One of the swords was pulled out and slashed the mechanical sentry’s head off. The soldier looked for the other doombot, but had to jump back as a red beam blasted the robot away. The soldier tried to use his gun but was thrown back against the wall by a shockwave thrown from Liam who just climbed up the wall. A horrible sulphur like smell assaulted his nostrils, the words ‘Guten Abend, mein Freund’ going through his mind as darkness claimed him. ‘Eastern wall secure.’ Cyclops said as Wolverine climbed up the walls using his claws, Electron hanging on his back while Thunderbird finished with the Doombot down below before leaping up to meet his team. Storm slowly floated down, the rain stopping as her eyes turn normal. The group went to a door, high tech lock stopping their progress. ‘Electron.’ Scott said. Electron nodded and suddenly started to shrink. She crawled inside the lock. A few seconds later she came out, brushing herself as the small lock exploded with a small ‘thud’. ‘Small explosives do wonders.’ She smiled satisfied. ‘I hear that.’ Liam grinned. Wolverine pushed the door open, sniffing. ‘Got their scent...’ ‘Lead the way Wolverine....’ Cyclops said. The team moved in, Wolverine’s claws dispatching any Doombot that got in their way. A green robed figure stared at the monitors, noticying some of them seem to freeze for a minute. ‘The X-men are here, Sinister....’ the figure said. ‘Just like you said they would....’ He turned around, grabbing a metal like mask, putting it on his face. ‘but like the ones before them....they will face the wrath of DOOM!’ TBC .



Cat	Mar 5 2010, 02:23 PM Post #2
Secret Agent Posts: 545 Group: Members Member #58 Joined: March 17, 2009	Your chapter is in two parts I take it? Else I have no idea what I'm writing.



Gorvar	Mar 5 2010, 05:56 PM Post #3
Self claimed fanfic critic. Posts: 3,265 Group: Members Member #38 Joined: February 8, 2009	Well you can take it from here, have them find the X-men, escape, fight with Doom and just make it over the border. Or i can do it.



LoganActor	Mar 5 2010, 08:03 PM Post #4
Plays Logan on TV! Posts: 631 Group: Members Member #96 Joined: October 23, 2009	Awesome stuff, sir. Fantastic work.



Gorvar	Mar 5 2010, 08:12 PM Post #5
Self claimed fanfic critic. Posts: 3,265 Group: Members Member #38 Joined: February 8, 2009	Thanks Loganactor ^^ I hope i did all the characture's well, that is my biggest fear. you think i should finnish this chapter with them escaping to the border or should i let Cat take over? Edited by Gorvar, Mar 5 2010, 08:12 PM.



LoganActor	Mar 5 2010, 08:19 PM Post #6
Plays Logan on TV! Posts: 631 Group: Members Member #96 Joined: October 23, 2009	I'd continue at least to the point that they find the captured X-Men. But that's just me. And you did my character fantastically. I was nervous, having someone else take control of someone I created and then grew attatched to (never had anyone play "me", if you know what I mean), but you did a great job. I really liked the fact that most of what came out of Liam's mouth were swear words. falls over laughing Great great stuff.



Gorvar	Mar 5 2010, 08:24 PM Post #7
Self claimed fanfic critic. Posts: 3,265 Group: Members Member #38 Joined: February 8, 2009	Well if any character has the right to swear it's Liam, after all i think your the first author here who began with the profanity. Agreed it felt a bit short, i'll continue untill they escape, stay tuned for chapter 2 of chapter 3....yeh, i know.



Gorvar	Mar 5 2010, 09:51 PM Post #8
Self claimed fanfic critic. Posts: 3,265 Group: Members Member #38 Joined: February 8, 2009	The group moved as quietly as possible despite their large number, following Wolverine who in turn followed his nose. Logan raised his hand in the air, turning around. ‘I got two guards in front of a door....i smell your mates behind that door.’ Cyclops nodded. ‘The info SHIELD gave us says they’re in there....Liam?’ ‘Got it...’ the ranger said, grabbing his rifle. Liam lay down, taking aim at the two bored guards. He closed one of his eyes, his figner on the trigger. He had to make this quick and silent. He remembered his training and held his breath. Twice he pulled the trigger, twice his darts hit their mark. Like moths they fell, snoring. ‘Good shot kid.’ Logan grinned, helping him up. ‘Good training.’ He replied. ‘Funny.’ George said. ‘I thought you Americans always had to waste fifty bullets to hit one guy.’ Both Liam and John glared, the Belgian detective immediately backing off. ‘Just kidding, merde...’ Abigail walked past, doing her routine to open the door. After the small ‘thud’ the door creaked open, Logan and John went in first, their mutant powers being able to withstand any resistance if there were any. To John’s disappointment, there wasn’t any. Logan looked up as he saw the four X-men laying in pods above them, sleeping. ‘I’ll get them down.’ Electron said and ran over, punching down keys on the main computer. Already the ceiling was creaking as the pods lowered down. ‘Nobody can top my leet haxxor skillz.’ She exclaimed, grinning happily. The pods opened, Logan stood over one of them. To him, she was the most beautiful woman he saw in his life. She had hair as red a blood, her face was young and innocent, she seemed kind yet battle hardened. She reminded him of someone else, someone he loved a long time ago.... ‘Jean?’ Logan glanced to his left, Cyclops holding her hand. Despite not seeing his eyes he knew what she meant to him, deep inside Logan roared. Why this, why always this?! The girl opened her lovely green eyes, smiling relieved as he held her. ‘Scott...thank god you’re here...’ Logan imagined himself in Cyke’s stead. The other three pods opened shortly after, the three others waking up shortly after. ‘Can you see why Doctor Doom kidnapped them?’ Storm asked, leaning over Abigail’s shoulder. Abigail smiled and nodded. ‘I’m uploading the data of the research to my portable database, I’ll decipher the info when we get back home.’ ‘Hell...’ Liam muttered. ‘I can merely program my VCR....’ ‘Team two, this is team one, we fulfilled our objective, where are you, over?’ John spoke into the communicator, but received only static. ‘Team two, this is team one, we fulfilled our objective, where are you, over?’. Still no reply. The native sighed and shook his head. ‘Nothing.’ Cyclops cursed. ‘Damn...Jean, can you-?’ She shook her head. ‘I can barely read someone’s mind who’s stood next to me, let alone over a entire building.’ ‘Maybe it’s the building’s stone walls disturbing the signal?’ Nightcrawler suggested, looking outside the door. ‘No.’ Scott shook his head. ‘These are top of the line communicators, it shouldn’t have these problems.’ He paused a moment. ‘Kurt, George, look around the castle, try to look in the lower levels, that’s where the garage should be, if you found a vehicle or the other team let us know.’ ‘Jawohl.’ Kurt said and BAMPF-ed off, George merely nodded and faded away. Logan SNIKT his claws up. ‘We got company....’ he growled and pointed to the door. The X-men, including the now fully aware X-men turned to the door when they saw a large green cloaked melatic like being stepping inside, strange energy filling the room. ‘Greetings X-men...’ it said in a eery voice. ‘My name is Victor von Doom, and I believe you are trespassing.’ ‘Trespass this!’ Thunderbird shouted and leaped forward, his fist colliding on the metal mask. The figure flew against the wall, stone debris falling everywhere. ‘See, he isn’t so th-‘ A large thunderbolt hit John square in the chest, the proud soldier flew to the other side of the room. ‘Not even your previous team-mates were this rude.’ Doom said, both his hands enveloped in lightning. ‘It seems I should succeed where your parents failed.’ ‘X-men!’ Cyclops shouted, his optic blast hitting Doom’s hand full on. ‘ATTACK, HOLD THE LINE!’ Time-Warrior and Nightcrawler ported inside the garage. ‘Mein Gott...’ Kurt gasped and pointed ahead. George had to stop himself from gagging as he saw the sight. Dozens of dead bodies lay around the floor, blood decorating the wall. They heard the insane sound of laughter, of blood thrown around like mad. Tw turned around the corner, seeing the unconscious forms of Sean Cassidy and Piotr Rasputin, with the hulking form of Sabretooth stood over a pile of dead foes, his claws going in and out of dead bodies. ‘Sabretooth?’ Time-warrior asked, keeping his head on one of his swords. The tall predator turned back, grinning. ‘Ah, I see you finally decided to join the party....’ he grinned. Kurt held his hands together and muttered prayers. ‘Did you....’ Sabretooth nodded proudly. ‘Yes I did, don’t worry about those two, they’ll be fine.’ He stepped off his pile and patted a car beside him, the blood on his hand rubbing off on the car. ‘This should be working fine, drove one of those myself, should have enough palce for everyone.’ ‘Good...Kurt?’ George nudged Kurt out of the horror. ‘Go get the others, tell them we’ll be driving outside.’ Kurt nodded and teleported away from one chaos....right into a other kind of chaos. The german acrobat gasped as he saw Team One, severely beat up, along with the rescued X-men battle a foe clearly stronger then them all combined. ‘Kurt!’ Cyclops shouted and came, his costume half ripped off.’Did you find them?’ ‘Yes, we have transport!’ ‘Good, we’ll move right now, show us the way, BOBBY!’ ‘On it!’ ice-man shouted and created a wall of ice between Doom and them. ‘Stay close!’ Cyclops said and blasted his way through to the garage. Team one jumped out of the rubble, running inside the car, George looking confused. ‘What’s going on?!’ The others just jumped in. ‘Information please, what?!’ ‘I believe.’ Hank Mccoy began. ‘That a explanation is best served for later after we escaped our current predicament.’ ‘...the hell are you, Einstein?!’ ‘Get inside Gargan, now!’ Logan pushed him in, closing the door behind him. The car drove off, bursting through the garage door as Doom stepped in. ‘You may run as much as you want...’ Doom chuckled. ‘But I already have what I want...’ Doom raised his left arm, pushing a button on it. ‘But then again, I cannot make it to easy on you can I?’ As he stepped outside, he smiled as dozens of his helicopters flew overhead, chasing the escapees. Already in his mind Doom was busy with other plans, other ideas for his Doombots. Soon the world would know the name of Victor von Doom and tremble.



LoganActor	Mar 5 2010, 10:13 PM Post #9
Plays Logan on TV! Posts: 631 Group: Members Member #96 Joined: October 23, 2009	Pretty good, sir. Loving it. The exchange between Logan, Liam, and George actually made me laugh out loud.



Gorvar	Mar 5 2010, 10:18 PM Post #10
Self claimed fanfic critic. Posts: 3,265 Group: Members Member #38 Joined: February 8, 2009	Thanks dude I rather wanted to keep George's role limited, because y'know, this is a team based comic with a small spotlight on Logan and Sabretooth. i've writte so much on TW i just want to give him a minimum amount of lines and experiment with the interactions with other CC's and with his shared past with Wolverine, Logan doesn't seem to remember. I sort of threw some plot elements here such as Doom's experiments on the X-men that seem to have paid off, his co-operation with Sinister (before the x-men even met him) and a small unnamed cameo that Cat may or may not use later on.



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