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| Anne | Apr 27 2009, 10:42 AM Post #51 |
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 Gorvar, I LOVED it! You always throw little bits of humor and sadness in at just the right times, and the whole thing was so exciting! Including Human Torch and Thing was perfectly done. And I'm really glad everyone got a happy ending. I'll be anxiously awaiting the next release! |
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| Gorvar | Apr 27 2009, 11:20 AM Post #52 |
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Thanks ^^ First time i got clapping people as a reward ^^; Again thank you all for reading and i promise i'll do my ebst to make more good chapters. |
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| Gorvar | Apr 28 2009, 02:43 PM Post #53 |
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‘Closing the Vault’ Part 1 of 4. Written by Gorvar Edited by Templedog Unique forum Characters created by Templedog, Gorvar, Brian Knippenberg and Anne. X-men and other Marvel characters belong to Marvel. Earth’s only hope is something Spectacular. Team Roster Anthony Durgrath aka Loam: can turn himself into the element earth. George Gargan aka Time-Warrior: limited manipulation of space and time. Aurick Taylor aka Qwerty: ability to hack and control any computer system. Brooke Davis aka Tranq: can calm down the enemy into a false sense of security. Gabriel Harrison aka Bolgani: can turn into a great white ape. Jason Traq aka Minotaur: Can turn into a beast with incredible power. Molly Dylan aka Sprite: Can manipulate water. Logan aka Wolverine: adamantium claws and healing factor Hank Mccoy aka Beast: Genius intellect and acrobatic skills. Laura aka X-23: Clone of wolverine with same skills Wade Wilson aka Deadpool: Mercenary with healing factor. Closing the Vault Part 1: Old foes, New foes. Undisclosed location somewhere in New york 00.00 Local time Only one light bulb illuminated the former grand, now abandoned warehouse. The boxes inside the building were conviently placed for possible ambush spots….just like he foresaw. ‘Bastion….’ One of his aides asked. ‘Are you certain they will not attack us?’ The cyborg looked at his left, the armed guard wearing a cross tabard slowly started to sweat. ‘I am 99.91% certain they will not.’ Bastion replied, walking forward. ‘They need our aid to kill a common foe…’ Bastion and his two guards walked into the light, awaiting their mysterious new ally. Bastion’s senses registered footsteps, three footsteps to be exact. Beofre the guards could react he spoke. ‘I see you have arrived…’ ‘Si…’ a female voice spoke up, a small blue bulb appearing In the darkness. ‘My database does not recognise you…who are you?’ The woman stepped into the light, revealing herself and her companions. She wore a suit of sorts, electricity sparking around hers, whilst her compagions, two males, didn’t. The larger male to her right wore sunglasses and a yellow suit, on her left, a reptilian looking human a green suit. ‘We are the Children of the Fault.’ The woman proclaimed, her Spanish accent evident. ‘And we have come to ask you to aid us in avenging our mateles.’ ‘Who killed your brothers?’ Bastion asked. ‘The X-men….’ Same location. 16 hours later. ‘It’s good stuff!’ a shadowy dealer said to his clients. ‘Fully charged up piece of armor that give you super powers, imagine how many banks you can rob!’ His clients were suspicious. ‘Ah, a demonstration?’ The dealer asked, slipping a glove on. He aimed his hand at a box not to far away. He grinned, a plasma bolt incinerating the box. The clients and their guards gasped. ‘How much for 5?’ one asked. ‘100 000 dollars per set.’ The dealer put the glove back. ‘Get 3 and you get a free night at Las Vegas Ceasar’s hotel.’ The clients grabbed for their wallets, the dealer grinning. The ground beneath them shook heavily, the wall behind them crumbling. In the gap where the sunlight came in revealed four figures. ‘Sweet Christmas suckers!’ the large man cried out, charging into battle first. ‘It’s Cage!’ One of the guards shouted, firing their weapons on the African American super hero. The bullets however bounced off him, his fists hitting men square In the face. Above them spider-webs fell on the guards, dragging their guns away or webbing them to the spot. ‘Ah ah ah, didn’t your mummy told you to not sell super powered weapons of mass destruction?’ Spider-man quipped. ‘I think they’re mothers were not great parents spidey.’ None other then Time-warrior replied, his swords slashing guns in half, rewinding some bullets to explode the weapons where they were shot from. ’After all, who let kids play with waterguns?’ ‘My aunt never let me play with waterguns…!’ spider-man chuckled, doing his job. Although the three ‘rebel’ avengers were trying their best to not make any kills, Wolverine, in his X-force costume still covered in blood, was racking them up. He knew their employers, what kind of people they were themselves….he didn’t hold back. He was tracking those jokers them himself when Gargan called him on a mutual lead. Somebody was selling weapons, not just normal weapons, super powered weapons. 12 hours ago one of the new owners decided to go to his kid’s school, take her away from his ex-wife….12 people got killed before Logan was able to slash his head off. 12 people to many, this thing needed to be stopped before it could get worse. He found 3 warehouses like this, selling weapons Logan swore he had seen before. Time-Warrior found 2 others, but thanks to his sources he found out the biggest sale was going to happen at this place, but security was going to be tight. Hence they called for any New Avenger they could find. His claws were dripping with blood, made 8 kills so far. He promised Luke he wouldn’t kill those Spidey or himself took down, they weren’t killers. ‘Logan, watch out!’ George shouted. Wolverine jumped out of the way just in time as the Dealer, now wearing a complete armor set, charged his arms. ‘You fu**ing trashed my scene!’ he cried out, firing plasma bolts at random. ‘Get him.’ Logan growled, snikking his claws. ‘We need him alive Logan!’ Luke shouted, punching a gurd out. ‘Got it!’ Wolverine shouted, leaping at his foe. The claws pierced through the suit, taking out it’s power core in one strike. ‘What the….’ The dealer mouthed. ‘Language!’ Spider-man kicked him upside the head, knocking him out. After the fight, the wall crawler webbed up the unconscious guards, George taking a look at the crate. ‘Thought so….’ Tw sighed. ‘More Purifier tech?’ Logan asked, leaning on a box of crates. ‘Not just Purifier….’ Time-Wariror picked up one of the gloves the dealer used as a demonstration. ‘This is something else…’ The time bender pondered, gasping when he realised what he held. ‘This is Children of the Vault weaponry!’ ‘Children of the what?’ Luke asked, his strong arms crossed. ‘Vault…’ Logan replied. ‘X-men bad guys.’ ‘Man, who doesn’t try to kill you?’ ‘No clue bub….’ ‘So, somebody stole SHIELD confiscated weapons again?’ spider-man walked in. ‘No…this is recent….’ Tw growled. ‘No SHIELD tags or anything, and the only remaining armour like this should’ve been burned in the explosion with the rest of the Children with the Conquistador.’ ‘Unless….’ Logan looked up, George nodding. ‘They are not as dead as we thought they were…’ ‘Guys, spidey sense telling cops are coming!’ Spider-man pointed outside. The three other Avengers nodded, Tw porting them all away. San Franseco X-men Hq. 17.00 Local time. Gabe and Molly sat watching tele, her head on his lap as usual, while Qwerty told the students what happened the week before. ‘Aw man, I wanted to go on a space adventure….’ A large rock like create sighed. ‘Maybe next time Santo.’ A red headed young girl with a silver skin smiled, patting his shoulder. Qwerty looked over to a young girl with black hair, meditating in the corner. ‘How’s Laura?’ Santo shrugged. ‘Ya mean X-23 again?’ Qwerty sighed. ‘Fallen back has she?’ Mercury nodded. ‘Ever since Surge and Boom Boom died….’ The group smiled as a small girl ran buy, being chased by her father. ‘Becca, come back here!’ Jason shouted. ‘No!’ the girl giggled. ‘One way or another, your going to have bath girl!’ ‘No..!’ Becca shouted with glee. Santo picked the girl up by her collar, looking at the little girl. ‘Kid….go have a bath will ya?’ Becca blinked at the stone creature. ‘What are you lookin’ at?’ She poked him at the nose, giggling. ‘Awwww…’ Molly cooed. ‘Isn’t she adorable?’ ‘Yeh….’ Rockslide groaned, handing her back to her father. ‘Really cute.’ ‘Thank you Santo.’ Jason smiled. ‘She’ll always like this when she needs to take a bath.’ ‘Go figure….’ As Jason took the girl Molly sighed happily. ‘I want a baby now….’ Gabe started to sweat heavily. ‘What, urghm…why?’ The waterbender giggled kissing him deeply. ‘Just kinding Gabe.’ She laid her head back in his lap, The wakanda-ian sighed of relief. Meanwhile at the basement. ‘No.’ Scot Summers said, folding his arms. In the small room he listend to Beast, Wolverine, Time-Warrior and Loam’s plea. ‘Why no summers?’ Loam asked. ‘Because I said so, I already lost one X-man because of your little space adventure, I don’t want to lose another by chasing ghosts.’ ‘Get your head out of your own a** Summers!’ George exploded. ‘This isn’t some ghost we’re hunting down, it’s the friggin’ Children of the Vault teaming up with the purifiers!’ ‘You THINK they are, for all we know the purifiers could’ve found those weapons.’ ‘Scott…’ Beast interrupted. ‘He’s right, from the glove I was able to salvage from the institute, and the new glove George gave us, it shows a identical match.’ ‘They’re out there, ready to attack us slim, we need to find out where they are.’ ‘No.’ Scott replied. ‘It’s to risky to bet it all on a hunch, besides, we have our own things going on here…’ ‘Own things, like seeing how our students get blown up whilst you twiddle your fingers?!’ Loam exploded. ‘For once I agree with Gargan, we need to find them before they find us!’ ‘Watch it Durgrath.’ Scott glared behind his visor. ‘Being a elader means making unpouliar decisions, and I’m not quite over the fact you left earth without my permission.’ ‘We got friggin’ beamed up like Star Trek!’ George cried out. ‘You know what…f**k you Summers.’ He growled, leaving the room, Logan and Anthony following. ‘You were a bit hard there Scott.’ Hank said. ‘Maybe, but I need them more then ever Hank, I don’t want to lose any more students.’ ‘Their way might make certain of that.’ ‘Or do the complete opposite….’ ‘We all agreed?’ Loam asked, walking with the two other X-men. George nodded, they talked about Cyclops’s suspected reaction before they talk and made a choice beforehand. They were going ALONE. ‘With just three of us…it’s goin’ to be hard.’ Logan commented. ‘Not to worry.’ George grinned. ‘I know somebody who is interested in random fights and money.’ ‘Who?’ loam asked. ‘Ah hell no Gargan, no friggin’ way!’ ‘We could use the help logan.’ George replied. ‘You call HIM help?!’ ‘Who are we talking about?’ Loam was completely lost. 20 minutes later. X-jet Hanger. ‘Helllooooooooo Logan!’ a man in red costume walked towards the group, armed with a katana on his back and uzi’s on his sides. Logan groaned, stepping in the jet. ‘Nice you could join us Wade, you ready?’ George asked. ‘More ready then a bag of cheerios during Superbowl!’ Deadpool exclaimed, stepping on. ‘Oh, flatscreen! Dibs on the window seats!’ ‘Seriously, who is this guy?’ Loam asked, putting his costume on. ‘The less you know you the better.’ George grinned, closing the X-jet door. He turns around, blinking at X-23 in her X-force costume allready prepping the ship. ‘The heck are you doing here Laura,’ Loam asked. ‘New Mission, avenge Hellion, Surge and Boom Boom.’ She coldly replied. ‘Cant blame her…’ Logan put his red eyed mask on. Deadpool stared at X for a moment. ‘I have a strange feeling of Déjà vu here….’ Deadpool ponderd. ‘Excet we were in the future, fighting bad guys, and you tickeld mybrain with your claws.’ The merc pointed to Logan. Wolverine groaned. ‘Start the friggin’ ship X….less I hear of Wade, the better. ‘Affirmative…’ she replied, the X-jet flying to Ecuador, the palce where the crates were shipped from. Ecuador Coast Two VERY LONG hours later. ‘…and you pass one down pass it around, and there are no bottles left on the wall!’ deadpool sung. The group sighed of relief, glad the 10000 bottles on the wall song ended. ‘One more time!’ deadpool began. ‘10 000 of Ghargh-‘ Loam grabbed Deadpool by the neck, squeezing. ‘Shut….up….NOW!’ he glared. ‘Sure…’ deadpool squealed, stopping. ‘No biggy…’ ‘We arrive the dock in 3 minutes.’ X-23 said, piloting the ship with Tw. ‘Let’s hope we can find some decent Tra-‘ The ship shook heavily, crashing down towards the ground. ‘What the Bloody hell-?!’ Loam shouted. ‘Unidentified object hit our engines.’ X calmly replied. ‘No shit.’ Tw unbuckled. ‘Hang on everyone!’ They disappeared out of the ship, re-appearing on the coast. X-23 and Wolverine immediately SNIKT their claws up. ‘Company!’ George shouted, drawing his swords. He was right, for dozens of children of the vault arrived, attacking the group. Not just the Children, but a large group of Putifier forces, armed to the teeth. ‘In God’s name, kill the Satan’s spawn!’ their commander shouted. But despite being outnumbered, despite being well armed, they forgot rule number one. Do NOT mess with the X-men. ‘100 targets!’ Laura said, clawing a Purifier’s face off. ‘99.’ She corrected, blood spluttering over her costume. ’20 a piece, kill em all!’ Logan shouted, his claws doing the talking. ‘Hey, you remember when we got shot out of the sky, and we got ambushed by zealots?’ George asked, cutting away. ‘Good times, right?’ ‘Aaaayayayaya!’ Deadpool shouted, uzi’s blazing through the mob of enemies. ‘Bloody insane, all of you!’ Loam changed into sand, hardening his fists, pounding away the villains, but leaving his body soft, bullets and lasers going through him. Meanwhile, on top of a nearby mountain, Basion watched the battle below. ‘phase 1 is complete, Perro, begin phase 2.’ San Franseco X-men Hq 10 seconds later ‘Poofy!!!’ Becca screamed with glee, being dried by Jason in his monster form. ‘You’re the only person on the planet who isn’t scared of me like this.’ Jason smiled. The house shook heavily, the little girl screaming. Suddenly the bath’s water got pulled THROUGH the sink. Minotaur picked his girl up, running to the basement. He could see through the corridors men with a white cross on their tabards attack the house, guns blazing. One of them noticed Beast, who joined the fray with Cyclops, fighting alongside Bolgani using their simian powers. ‘Die by God’s han-‘ Minotaur picked him up with his free hand, throwing him hard against the wall, the sound of ribs cracking. Everywhere around him, he saw fighting. But the X-men present defended themselves very well, Spite using her water powers to seal the holes in the walls. ‘That’ll hold them off for a second!’ Molly exclaimed. ‘Jason!’ Brooke ran up to Minotaur.’ Give me the baby hurry!’ Minotaur nodded, handling the girl over. ‘Sure, but why-?’ The roof collapsed, The Children of the Vault coming in, Perro grinning at them. ‘Buenos Dias my mutant friends.’ He grinned. ‘My name is Perro, and I have come for that girl.’ TBC |
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| Anne | Apr 28 2009, 07:36 PM Post #54 |
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Yay! X-23 and Deadpool! Just when I thought Gorvar's writing couldn't get any better! |
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| Gorvar | Apr 29 2009, 01:31 AM Post #55 |
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Woah thanks ^^ i got into a X-force phase so....hah glad you like it! |
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| Gorvar | Apr 29 2009, 03:04 PM Post #56 |
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Hope everybody else likes the fanfic? I'm not getting any replies from my other readers. |
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| Gorvar | May 1 2009, 05:30 PM Post #57 |
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bumps |
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| Gorvar | May 5 2009, 05:40 AM Post #58 |
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Next chapter should be either tonight or tommorow. Currently planning to make a spin off series. |
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| Anne | May 5 2009, 11:21 AM Post #59 |
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Really? What sort of spin off series? |
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| Gorvar | May 5 2009, 04:42 PM Post #60 |
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Well...... Let's say i'm intrested in makin a small series about the team, but more focusing on each member's backstory beofre they came across the X-men and how they got in. |
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